Do you like this scene I wrote?

You need stage directions for this. People just keep coming in and out and its unclear when people are all singing. But the lyrics are good, it makes me think of 'Into the Woods' the way you wrote the lyrics. Oh and make sure when ever you write that someone has done something/is doing something physically to put it in parentheses and italicize it. The basis of the whole thing is good, you just need to look at a bunch of scripts for plays and figure out how to write it correctly. But it has potential. :)